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How to Write A C1 Advanced Proposal

How to Write A C1 Advanced Proposal

How To Write A C1 Advanced Proposal Introduction

Knowing how to write a C1 Advanced proposal which will blow examiners away is a tricky business.

CAE Writing Tip: Notice I used the phrasal verb 'blow away' in the sentence above. This is a separable phrasal verb which could be used in informal C1 Advanced writings.  

Before we look in more detail at proposals, it's important to remember you have a choice of 3 questions in part 2 of the CAE writing test. The questions might ask you to write: a letter/email, a proposal, a report or a review. You only need to answer 1 question and you need to write between 220-260 words.

It's really important to know how the examiners mark your writing in order to get the highest marks possible for this paper. That's why I made my CAE writing marking criteria page.

How To Write A C1 Advanced Proposal Technique

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C1 Advanced Proposal - Instructions

  1. Read the C1 Advanced Proposal question below and then read the answer.
  2. Write down any mistakes you see and then complete the examiner's assessment scale here. Remember to use the examiners marking criteria to help you.
 

C1 Advanced Proposal - Sample Question

The Managing Director at your company has requested you to provide some ways to improve the morale of your colleagues. He wants you to propose some suggestions for what and how to motivate staff to improve their physical and mental health.

Similar companies have suggested healthy diets, sleep and exercise routines, socialising and taking holidays.

Write your proposal using these or your own ideas and provide reasons to support your suggestions.

C1 Advanced Proposal - Sample Answer

C1 Advanced Assessment Scale Template

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Subscale

Mark (1-5)

Commentary

Content

Communicative Achievement

Organisation

Language

   

C1 Advanced Proposal With Feedback

I will write my comments in bold and italics.


Proposal for improving the morale of employees in the workplace.

Following recent concern voiced about the health of the company's employees, I have come up with the following proposal to improve the wellness of company workers.

Firstly, most employees spend too much time sitting at their desk. It is hardly surprising, therefore, that many employees complain of feeling unfit and being overweight. Since it is difficult to exercise during the day, I suggest that lunch-time fitness classes, such as aerobics or yoga, could be run on the premises. Admittedly, it might be difficult to encourage employees to give up their lunch break, so maybe after-work fun fitness classes could be arranged and we could make it more of a social activity, by going to the pub, together afterwards. What would be the benefits of doing these things?

Another health issue is that of healthy eating. Too many employees are overweight. Healthier meals could be introduced in the restaurant and an incentive given to choose a healthy meal over a more fattening one, by offering such meals which are significantly cheaper, being heavily-subsidised by the company.

Too many employees are also complaining of tiredness and being overworked. For this reason, I think that employees' holidays should be strictly monitored and employees encouraged to take all holidays owed. Furthermore, fun weekends away could be organised such as hiking weekends. These weekends would increase the health and fitness of employees as well as being a good team-building exercise and increasing the employees general feeling of well-being among staff (I tried to use different words to avoid saying ‘employees’ too many times).

I hope these proposals will be of use and I hope that their implementation will lead to increased health and mental and physical health levels in employees.

C1 Advanced Sample Proposal Critique

Subscale

Mark (1-5)

Commentary

Content

4

Most of the content is relevant to the task and the target reader is informed. You mention ‘social activity’ and healthier meals being ‘cheaper’ but more reasons could be given in support of your recommendations. What are the benefits of yoga or fitness classes? Can you give another example of how to motivate staff?

Communicative Achievement

4

The arguments are expressed clearly and the register is consistent and appropriate in a formal/semi-formal style. 

The arguments are introduced with clear opening phrases ‘Firstly’, ‘Another health issue is…

Organisation

3

There are no bullet points for recommendations or subheadings in the proposal. While these are optional, they can be a useful addition in helping structure and organise your writing and expressing this clearly to the examiner.

Language

4

The language is good and shows a range of vocabulary as well as some simple and more complex grammatical constructions. Good linking words have been used ‘furthermore’ and qualifying phrases ‘admittedly’. Sometimes there is repetition of the same words.
   

Homework - Read my corrections on the answer below...

Proposal for improving the (‘language students’) communication at school.

Following recent concern voiced about the English skills of the school’s students, I have come up with the following proposal to improve the communication of students at school.

Firstly, most students (‘at our school’) spend too much time taking classes related to other subjects rather than learning a new language. It is hardly surprising, therefore, that many students complain of feeling uncommunicative and being shy (I think this could be your introduction and then you could add a sentence here about what they currently do to improve their communication skills). Since it is difficult to practice a new language during the day, I suggest that lunch-time language exercises, such as having an English menu containing main keywords related to food family ies, could be run on the premises.

Another communication issue is related to how shy they are. Too many students ‘are affected by’ address this issue, so for that, a program after-class could be arranged as a social activity going to an English pub (This may not be appropriate suggestion depending on what type of school it is). This social activity could serve as an incentive (good phrase) given to choose a leisure activity to practice the new language to ‘with’ each other and by offering such a wonderful language exchange, being heavily-subsidised by the school (this sentence is not so easy to read/understand).

I think that these proposals should be applied, and monitored in order to measure their impact on the students. In case that nothing works ed, as a last recommendation, I would encourage the school to organise fun weekends away, such as English basecamps weekends. These weekends would increase the communicative skills of students as well as being a good team-building exercises and increasing student’s general feelings of well-being (‘and helping them to become more confident’).

I hope these proposals will be of use and hope that their implementation will lead to increased communication skills levels in students.

Homework - Read This C1 Advanced Proposal Question

You can find the following question in 'Cambridge English Advanced Practice Tests - Plus 2' by Nick Kenny and Jacky Newbrook.

 

c1 advanced proposal question

Homework - Print & Make Corrections On This C1 Advanced Proposal Answer

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how to write a c1 advanced proposal

Homework - Download & Complete This Assessment Scale Template

Download here.

Subscale

Mark (1-5)

Commentary

Content

Communicative Achievement

Organisation

Language

 

 

Homework - Read my corrections on the answer below...

Proposal for improving the (‘language students’) communication at school.

Following recent concern voiced about the English skills of the school’s students, I have come up with the following proposal to improve the communication of students at school.

Firstly, most students (‘at our school’) spend too much time taking classes related to other subjects rather than learning a new language. It is hardly surprising, therefore, that many students complain of feeling uncommunicative and being shy (I think this could be your introduction and then you could add a sentence here about what they currently do to improve their communication skills). Since it is difficult to practice a new language during the day, I suggest that lunch-time language exercises, such as having an English menu containing main keywords related to food family ies, could be run on the premises.

Another communication issue is related to how shy they are. Too many students ‘are affected by’ address this issue, so for that, a program after-class could be arranged as a social activity going to an English pub (This may not be appropriate suggestion depending on what type of school it is). This social activity could serve as an incentive (good phrase) given to choose a leisure activity to practice the new language to ‘with’ each other and by offering such a wonderful language exchange, being heavily-subsidised by the school (this sentence is not so easy to read/understand).

I think that these proposals should be applied, and monitored in order to measure their impact on the students. In case that nothing works ed, as a last recommendation, I would encourage the school to organise fun weekends away, such as English basecamps weekends. These weekends would increase the communicative skills of students as well as being a good team-building exercises and increasing student’s general feelings of well-being (‘and helping them to become more confident’).

I hope these proposals will be of use and hope that their implementation will lead to increased communication skills levels in students.

Homework - How To Write A C1 Advanced Proposal - Feedback

 

Subscale

Mark (1-5)

Commentary

Content

3

The content is largely relevant. Various problems have been stated but these could be given a few more specific details. Several recommendations for activities have also been suggested. There could be a little more emphasis on what they are currently doing to improve their communication skills.

Communicative Achievement

4

The main ideas and proposals are put forward in a coherent manner. It is easy to follow and understand most of the points, with occasional confusion in one or two sentences, for example when referring to the ‘incentive’.

Organisation

3

The proposal is laid out in a straightforward way. It is possible to give proposals paragraph headings and this can help make the layout and structure more obvious. There is an appropriate title, though this could be made more specific. The introduction could also be strengthened perhaps by moving one or two sentences up from the first body paragraph: “Firstly...shy”.

Language

4

There is evidence of a strong command of the language. Various expressions and some less common lexis are used, for example: ‘heavily subsidised’. Some more complex vocabulary has also been used, ‘could serve as an incentive’ with a good degree of control, ‘it is hardly surprising…’.
There are a few small  language errors but these do not impede communication.

 

 

Pass or Fail

This proposal received the following marks:

Content - 3
Communicative Achievement - 4
Organisation - 3
Language - 4

= 14/20.

The student would only need 10/20 in order to get the C1 level for the writing exam paper (24/40).

If you can't remember much about the CAE writing marking criteria, go back to that page here.

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2 thoughts on “How to Write A C1 Advanced Proposal

  1. Hello,
    I watched Mr. Rory for the first time at youtube. He is a very good English teacher. I am a C1 English student preparing for the Exam. I have problems with writing. I often don’t know what to write when it comes to write an Essay or Report.
    I must improve in writing. Also in the exam papers use of EnglishI need to become faster. I often have problems with understanding the whole text and find the right word.
    Is it possible to have online private lessons? If yes, how much would that cost?
    For your answer to my question I thank you in advance.
    Kind regards
    Manuela

    1. Hi Manuela,
      Thanks for your comments and kind words.
      I have sent you an email about lessons (remember to check your junk and spam mail just in case).
      Kind regards
      Rory

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