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How To Write A C1 Advanced Review

How To Write A C1 Advanced Review

The video below will show you some of the NEED TO KNOW information for writing a C1 Advanced review. Many C1 level English students struggle with knowing how to write C1 Advanced reviews. If you are the same, the video below will be really useful for you.
How To Write A C1 Advanced Review
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C1 Advanced Review Question

You see this announcement on a website which is particularly popular with university students and young adults. The website is called ‘Great People’:

Review Wanted

Send us a review about a person who, in your eyes, has had a great influence on the world.

How did this person influence the world?
What can we learn from this person’s character?

Write your review in 220-260 words.


Before you read the sample answer below, you should open this sheet and write down any mistakes you find while reading the answer. You should also open this document and write your marks and comments for the sample review.

C1 Advanced Review - Sample Answer 1

STEPHEN HAWKING:the life of a genius

World renowned physicist Stephen Hawking has died at the age of 76. The British scientist was famed for his work with black holes and relativity, and wrote several popular science books including A Brief History of Time. This scientist has also written several other books including:1.The Large Scale Structure Of Space-Time   2. A Brief History Of Time    3. Black Holes And Baby Universes And Other Essays   4. The Universe In A Nutshell    5. On The Shoulders Of Giants. The Great Works of Physics And Astronomy    6. God created the integers     7. George's secret key to the Universe    8. George's cosmic treasure hunt    9. George and the Big Bang    10. The Grand Design     11. My brief history. He has made many important discovers over the years, and has even been named the most influential person of the century.

Besides all of that, he was also an actor, he appeared in many movies and shows such as: Star Trek The Next Generation and The Simpsons. Sadly, no man is perfect, At the age of 22 Professor Hawking was given only a few years to live after being diagnosed with a rare form of motor neurone disease. The illness left him in a wheelchair and largely unable to speak except through a voice synthesizer.

They praised his "courage and persistence" and said his "brilliance and humour" inspired people across the world. “We will miss him forever.”

Review Sample Answer 1 - Mistakes & Corrections

Have a thorough read of the mistakes and corrections, followed by the examiner assessment scale below. This will help you understand how to write a C1 Advanced review.


STEPHEN HAWKING: the life of a genius

World renowned physicist Stephen Hawking has died (put this in the past simple because it’s not recent) at the age of 76. The British scientist was famed for his work with black holes and relativity, and wrote several popular science books including A Brief History of Time. This scientist has also ‘wrote’ written several other books including:1.The Large Scale Structure Of Space-Time   2. A Brief History Of Time    3. Black Holes And Baby Universes And Other Essays   4. The Universe In A Nutshell    5. On The Shoulders Of Giants. The Great Works of Physics And Astronomy    6. God created the integers     7. George's secret key to the Universe    8. George's cosmic treasure hunt    9. George and the Big Bang    10. The Grand Design     11. My brief history. (Don’t write so many examples in the exam. You also wouldn’t be able to research these names in the exam, but you could invent one or two names). He has made many important discover’ie’s over the years, and was has even been named the most influential person of the century.

Besides all of that, he was also an actor, he appeared in many movies and shows such as: Star Trek The Next Generation and The Simpsons. Sadly, no man is perfect (this phrase we use more when talking about somebody’s character rather than their physical disabilities), at the age of 22 Professor Hawking was given only a few years to live after being diagnosed with a rare form of motor neurone disease. The illness left him in a wheelchair and largely unable to speak except through a voice synthesizer.

They The New York Times (‘People around the world’ / ‘Academic and ordinary citizens of the world’) praised his "courage and persistence" and said his "brilliance and humour" inspired people across the world. “We will miss him forever.”

 

Subscale Mark (1-5) Commentary
Content 1 The two main points of the question are not addressed clearly enough. The target reader is informed as to what this person did, but not specifically how he influenced the world. The target reader would also not be informed as to what can be learnt from this person’s character.

The review is written in an informal register which is appropriate for this type of website.

 

Communicative Achievement 2 The reader is kept relatively well engaged with the passage and phrases such as “we will miss him forever” help with this. The review could be made even more engaging by asking the reader a question.

The review communicates some straightforward ideas in a relatively easy to follow manner. Some more complex ideas would be beneficial and these would perhaps come as a result of answering the two main points in the task. 

Organisation 2 There is no disctinction between the introduction and the first main paragraph. The review would be better if the first paragraph was separated after ‘several other books’ and the list of books was substituted with a discussion of how Stephen Hawking influenced the world.

The main ideas within the paragraphs are not developed upon. Often one idea is stated and is then followed another separate idea. For example, in the first paragraph the writer talks about Stephen Hawkins’ books and then his discoveries while in the second paragraph the writer talks about his films and then his physical condition. It is better to have one paragraph stating one main argument and for this argument to then be backed up with reasons and examples where appropriate.  

Language 2 Good knowledge of the English language is evident in this writing. The writing includes some less common vocabulary, for example: 

‘World renowned physicist’ 

‘Courage and persistence’

 The writing also includes some more complex grammatical structures, for example:

was given only a few years to live after being diagnosed with’.

Nevertheless, there is not much language of description or explanation which are often encouraged in reviews. The ‘how’ questions which haven’t been addressed provide the perfect opportunity to use this type of language. 

The writer’s opinion is included in a couple of areas but this could be made stronger, including why the website should feature your review instead of somebody else’s.

 

Review Sample 1 - Final Marks

Content - 1
Communicative Achievement - 2
Organisation - 2
Language - 2

Total: 7/20

Unfortunately this writing would require the student to get 17/20 in part 1 to achieve the C1 level for the writing exam paper (24/40). This is not an easy task.

Learn more about what marks you need to pass here.

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